I can't imagine seeing a mountain lion right next to me! Your story was very suspenseful! Oh and how old is Kaimen? It must have been cool for him to hold that shotgun! :) :-)
Adding on to my comment... that mountain lion will give me nightmares. D:
It didn't give me nightmares.
Super story! That freaked me out........ I'm NEVER going camping. At least , If you don't count a tent in my room "camping" .
Kaimen is 11 and a half years old. I wanted to grab the shotgun, but it was to heavy for me.Thank you soooo much for reading my story. I was pretty scared. At first the mountain lion didn't see or feel me and my brother sleeping by him or her. Then he or her did.
Yipes! That must have been pretty spooky!!! A mountain lion attacking you?! AAAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!
I love your sensory language and descriptive words.
Thank you so much,Grace!
LOVE your story! What if the lion attacked you? D:
I attack it!
I jumped right out of my seat when I heard growl ,and your story was amazing
I loved your story it was great!You made me think I was in the story shooting the mountain lion.I loved your intro.I liked your word choice.You should get a 4. 8)
Thanks Yandry. I feel like whatever story you have made desivres an A+ 1,000 times.
I agree with you Yandry it was a really really awesome story.
Keep it going I want to read another one of your awesome stories.
I'm making more
How 'bout 9+?
Thanks Varna! So did you feel like you where in the story? If you did I bet thats why you jumped out of your seat.Laugh out loud!
Yes,kaiden thats why i jumped right out of my seat.I felt like i was in your story great job really.
I'll have to ask Mr.Adams If we Can use LOL and OMG , st- THINGS like that.
I`m surprised you rote the story about camping.It`s my favorite thing to do in the summer with my family
Thanks Kaiden for answering my questions! :D :) :-)
i really love your conclusion
I hope you write more amazing stories like this :)
This reminds me of a story about me and a cougar,but I did like your story.:)
Wow you are so brave!!The picture of the mountain lion was really scary.I liked how you included diolague,it was perfect.Great job!!
Thank you Katherine.
Great story and its pretty scary sleeping by a lion .You used awsome sensory launguage.You were very brave.You use punctuation correctly .yea so great story kaiden
Kaiden your story is better than a 4 I think it needs higher than a 30
You're soooo brave and caring of your family and friend .
When I read your story it was awesome!!!!!!!Reading your story is better than watching tv.Your story is fantastic.
I love your story! I wouldn't have the guts to do what you did.That was awesome!
Girl, this story needs to be shared with the world!!!! Love it!
I love your story.I think it should get a 6+.
Great intro and I love your pictures.
You are awesome Kaiden!! Keep up the great work I loved your story it was awesome!!
I would have givin you 1000000+ points. You rock!!!!!!!!
I like how your story started in the middle of acttion = making your intro a 4++.
I could really see the mountain lion....scary for me!
p.s. I just felt a chill go down my back!
Best story I've ever read in my life fantastic kaiden
Wow its passed my bed time its 11:28 I should get off c u later
It was an awesome story to read. You should get a 5+. :) :) :) :) :) ;)
best story everI think your story is great. I think its fantastic.I like how you added all that detail.
I love your story u should 5 or 6.;)
i like your story
i love your story
I wished you would have gotton the loin and eat it for dinner , or sell it for some money.
I like the mountain lion pitcher it was deadly
I could not imagine having a mountain lion right beside me and having to grab a shot gun . I would never sleep outside again.
I like how you had a frightening part of your story.GREAT story!
A MOUNTION LOIN!!!!
i like your story and if i saw a mountain lion i would have no emotions but scared good job.
i like the mountain lion picter it sad that they shot the moutain lion.
I so glad that you are safe and sound .
I am so happy you are ok.
Your story was good i liked it it was fun to read.
I thought your story was great! It belongs in a book of your life adventures. I imagine if I saw a mountain lion, it would scare me. I might not be brave enough to shoot at the mountain lion.
I really love your story.Plus Mr.Adams showed us your story in class and read to us and it was a wonderful story.
I loved your story it was great.that crazy how you laid on a mountian lion
I want to say that this is the story is as good no better than Because of Winn-Dixie and I love that story.
you were so brave you saved you ad is kamein your brother
i love your story it was awesome i whould not try to fight a a animal so it was supper brave of yall to do that
I would be scared to see that mountain lion.I would run and hide in rv.
This story was amazing because you used great punctuation and u had great word choice and also this sis a funny story i hope i can came a good writer like u one day:):):):):):) bunches of love.
I have never went camping. So although it would be cool to see a Mountain lion, it would still be scary! Great story!
Your story was very exciting!! I liked how you described what happened with so much detail! Great job!
i loved your story it was great!!
i like the story you gause should rilly be carfule .