I love your conclusion and introduction. ^-^
Me too. :-)
It was an awesome story! I liked the intro.
I agree with both of you it was a awesome story
Keep it up :-)
I love your intro.
I love how you explain your feeling
I think you should get a 4+. Youn really hooked me! I think you should more hooking stories like this. :)
You desrved a trophy for the best actionus!
I forgot to say that you're great at using action ,and you are exellent at karate! Also i take karate classes sometimes . I know that you're great at karate and writing . This was the perfect story for you.
Thanks!!! Want me to show you karate. :)
I like it when u wrote,''I felt sea sick worried.''I also liked your conclusion.
I loved the way you created a mood .I felt like I could feel how nervous you were. I think this story deserves a 4.
Thanks both of you!!!!!!
I love your intro and your conclusion. They are awesome :-)
Thanks, Amit your story was awesome i liked it!!!
I loved your introduction!
I liked the end of the intro.I wish I knew how to do karate.I'm suprised you can do blocks.In the story you make it like doing blocks is hard which i'm certain they are.
You wrote an excellent storyI loved it!!! :-)
Read Yandry's incredible story people! :D
I loved the story you made
You wrote a wonderful story.I liked it
I loved how at the begining of your story you were nervous but then at the end, you were proud.
Yandry i thought you were great! Can you put more discribing things in your story.:)
Yandry your story was outstanding it was better than taking 3 whole weeks of vacation.Your story was magnificent
Thank you guys!!! Check out Amit's story his was awesome!!!
Your story is way better than my stories!
I loved your story.I liked how you wrote you were sea sick worried,It is very original!By the way,you are really awesome at karate!!
I GOT MY ORANGE BELT!!!!!
Great job,I almost got my orange belt,but ,then I quit.Ya,I know,right.
I wasn't nearly as awesome as you.Anyway,great story,I loved your story.
im blue belt
Congratulations Yandry!! That's awesome!
I give your story a 4+.
Thanks Natalie!!!! :D
I like your intro alot .
This story is awesome!I likked it when you wrote like a bannana in a blender.I aloso liked your introduction.
p.s. Great word choice! (:
I really love your story yandry it was really great.:)
Your story was better than eating candy everyday.Your story is outstanding!!!!!!
Man, long time I wrote this story. :/
I like your words you put
Ouch! That's gotta hurt.I'm not doing that.
i like the part wean the master yelled .
That was a great story. I'm in Jujitsu we did or blocks I got it right the first Just know I love your story.
wow that was cool do you do karate
I like the words you used when you got worried like you felt sea sick I would have gotten them wrong if I had to do that I am really proud of you.
every body had to feel that way one day