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Welcome to 2017 - Lilli's Favorite Time of Year

2/26/2017

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Thank you Lilli for sharing your great paper about your favorite time of the year!  Please read her paper and tell her what you thought was great by leaving her a comment below.  

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71 Comments
Angi
2/27/2017 08:46:00 am

Wow Lilli! Your word choice is amazing from your introduction all the way to your conclusion. I loved your organization too!

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Lilli
2/28/2017 01:49:18 pm

Thanks Angi.

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Jordan
2/27/2017 08:48:14 am

I like how you used great word choice and included the pool. Awesome paper and PERFECT TOPIC!

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Lilli
2/28/2017 01:50:45 pm

Thanks for commenting.

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Wyatt
2/27/2017 10:58:02 am

Your intro hooked me! I liked hearing about the game room. That was cool because you don't really see those. Your word choice really gives me an idea in my head.

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miguel g
3/2/2017 09:21:24 am

I agree

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Zyla
2/27/2017 10:58:53 am

I like how you described the game Flash because I had no idea what it was.

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Jakob
2/27/2017 11:00:48 am

I love the details! Your word choice was great! The intro was perfect and it totally hooked me.

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travis
2/27/2017 11:58:24 am

i love that you did february because that what i picket. i loved your word chouse

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Paul
2/27/2017 12:14:30 pm

I love how you used large descriptive words and mentioned playing pool. I like pool too. I also liked that you mentioned what Flash was. It sounds fun!!

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Trinity B
2/27/2017 12:16:38 pm

I like how you had fun. I also like that you chose the month with your birthday. It was so amazing!

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Emily
2/27/2017 01:03:40 pm

I like how you used examples for your relaxing time. I also like that you told us what the game Flash was because I didn't really know. It was amazing!

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Jaxson
2/27/2017 02:12:29 pm

I wish I could come to your birthday! The intro was awesome. I loved how you follow all the writer's rules. Drop the mic! (boom)

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lilli
4/18/2017 02:47:59 pm

BOOM! Drop the mic!

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Jadyn W
2/27/2017 02:17:12 pm

I thought your word choice was wonderful Lilli!. I wish I could go to your birthday too :-)

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Noah
2/27/2017 02:18:18 pm

I loved your stink through the whole paper. PE-EW!! I liked how your conclusion made me say, "Awww!" And your punctuation was flawless!

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Lilli
2/28/2017 01:55:28 pm

Thanks

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Giselle
3/1/2017 03:34:56 pm

That was very nice of you to say and thanks for making me laugh if it you who did

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Dilan
2/27/2017 02:28:00 pm

Lilli, your paper is really awesome! It is the best paper ever!

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Kiara
2/27/2017 03:21:39 pm

I love your paper Lilly and February is my favorite month to 😊😆😀😁😄😃😜😋my love for this paper:-)

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Sarah
2/27/2017 03:48:13 pm

I love your word choice and your topic.IT IS AMAZING!

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Giselle
2/27/2017 03:55:37 pm

It's great! I like how you used relaxing, snuggling, and other great words. I also like how you celebrate your birthday. It sounds really cool! It has a lot of details in it, and I like your really fabulous writing!

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sophie
2/27/2017 05:53:53 pm

I loved your word choice.Delightful,jiffy,exellent and so on and so on.I wish I could come to your next birthday!It was so EPIC!!!

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Sarah
2/27/2017 06:15:43 pm

I like how you organized your paragraphs 😍😜❤️👍🏻😇💕❤️😋😻💕💕💕❤️❤️😍😍

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Lilli
2/28/2017 03:05:51 pm

Thanks, like the emojis!

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Colin
2/27/2017 06:56:00 pm

I like how your paper is very detailed and that there is no dead words in the paper.Great job!

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Blake
2/27/2017 06:56:33 pm

I like your amazing words

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Colin
2/27/2017 06:58:21 pm

It is awesome!!👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏

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Emily
2/27/2017 07:13:30 pm

It's awesome and I hope you can do more!

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Sammie
2/27/2017 07:14:22 pm

Your paper really hooked me i think your paper is better than mine☺️☺️☺️Your paper is so awesome!!!!!

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Cohen
2/27/2017 07:20:58 pm

Love this paper lilli especially your word choice

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Sammie
2/27/2017 07:54:18 pm

Your paper was cool because you used a lot of details. I liked the part where you talked about Flash because I did not know what it was.your paper was awesome!!!!!!!

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Jacob
2/27/2017 07:59:49 pm

Great paper lilli I loved the flow that the paper had. you deserve a mic to drop!

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Lilli
2/28/2017 01:54:21 pm

Thanks Jacob, by the way I already have a mic.

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Natalie
11/4/2017 09:31:09 am

I agree, it makes me feel relaxed too

Daniela
2/27/2017 09:11:04 pm

I absolutely love your paper! It makes me feel relaxed. I like the questions you put in your introduction , it really hooked me! Your paper is epic!

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Lilli
2/28/2017 01:52:47 pm

Thanks Daniela, can't wait till I can read yours.

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Natalie
11/4/2017 09:28:21 am

I agree its makes me relax

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Derika
2/28/2017 10:33:56 am

i love your intro and examples lilli your words flowed with every sentens

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christian A
2/28/2017 10:35:07 am

Lilli, i SOOO loved your paper it was like soo cooooooooooool /:

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abbygail.e.
2/28/2017 12:09:59 pm

I liked how you followed all the writting rules.Your paper was awsome!

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Deshaun
2/28/2017 12:11:25 pm

I like your word choice. Nice Job!!!!

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niyaliza
2/28/2017 12:12:31 pm

I like that you have a smart brain and i like how you flow the 6 stips
and i love you'r story

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matthew
2/28/2017 12:16:37 pm

i like your story and that you just flowed through the six steps to the writing process! Keep up the very god work! I hope the work paid off and that everyone is enjoying your FTOY paper of should i say,favorite time of year paper!!!! :D :D :D :D :D :D

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matthew
2/28/2017 01:03:39 pm

best paper!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!! KEEP IT UP! :D :D :D :D :D :D :D (faces of forth graders)

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ameia
2/28/2017 01:53:08 pm

lilli you did a awasome good job and i am proud of you you is alamost the smartest person in the class

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Gage
2/28/2017 02:43:58 pm

hey lili nice paper you for sure put a lot of effort into this paper good job i wish i could come to your party!!

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Sarah
2/28/2017 03:28:58 pm

I like how you tell more about your story and what you do in your birthday. I Love It!😍😍😍❤️❤️❤️🙋🏼😻😻💕💕💕nice job

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Jadyn
2/28/2017 04:46:17 pm

Yay, Lilli!!!

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Sarah
3/1/2017 04:03:55 pm

I like your story because you hooked me to your story.😍😍😍😍😜😜😜😎😎😎😇😇😇💁🏼❤️❤️❤️💕💕💕✌🏻you should be a writing teacher like Mr.Adams.

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Unknown aka(Sammie)
3/1/2017 09:32:07 pm

I like your paper!!!Keep it up!!!!!!!

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Kierra
3/1/2017 10:01:30 pm

Wow Lily!I loved your word choice and i loved your intro to!I like to see how u and your family and friends are bonding together!

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miguel
3/2/2017 09:18:07 am

the intro hooked me

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matthew
3/2/2017 01:20:12 pm

:D :D :D :D :D I LOVE IT I WANNA READ IT 999,999,999,999,999,999,999,999,999,999,999,999,999,999 TIMES!!!!

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daisy
3/2/2017 01:24:08 pm

i love your story. Its just so beautiful! D.D.D.D.D.D.D.D.D.D..D.D.D.D.D.D.D.D..D.D.D.D.D.D.D.D.D..

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blake
3/2/2017 06:25:52 pm

amasing

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Jesse
3/3/2017 08:50:32 pm

I like how u describe what was the game flash u hooked me i had no idea what it was it was pe-ew it was amazing i hop u share more

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Jesse
3/3/2017 09:03:05 pm

Thank u for being the first one to put something on the website

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Natalie
11/4/2017 09:34:53 am

I like..... wait we barid that word. I love the story! :)

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mckenzie
11/9/2017 11:41:03 am

i loved your story so much.

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paul b.
11/9/2017 02:33:47 pm

One word, MAGIC!

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kya
11/10/2017 10:34:38 am

this. Is. the. Best 😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻😻


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destiny
11/10/2017 10:41:28 am

your cool

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hayden o.
11/14/2017 08:32:35 am

love the paraghraphs

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hayden o.
11/14/2017 08:37:51 am

like all the adjitives

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jude
1/18/2018 09:05:12 am

I liked the birthday

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vivian
9/12/2018 09:19:20 am

it was aok it was gooooooooooooooood...........

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nicolas
9/12/2018 11:01:22 am

i like this story

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kyndall
9/12/2018 12:18:09 pm

you have a great story i like it a lot i hope you have fun at your next birthday

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nganji
9/12/2018 02:13:51 pm

i love the story

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nganji
9/12/2018 02:16:24 pm

it is cool XD XD XD

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